Jackson Miles Biography

Started by zirman, 17-10-2011

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zirman

This is my Biography on my fallout character, Jackson Miles. It's a bit long but if you could please read it and give me suggestions on how to improve that would be great, Thanks!

Name: Jackson Miles
Age: 23
Origin: Vault 87, Pipboy Technician
Hair colour/style: Wavy, Medium length, black hair with a rough black bread
Colour:Caucasian
Affiliation: NCR First recon Stealth Class (No longer working with NCR)
Parents: Patrick and Stella Miles (Dead)
Siblings: Samantha Miles
Companion: Alice (Another Person i rp with)
Karma: Very Good
Favourite Weapon: PD-32-Z (custom weapon made by me)
Apparel:Dusker taken off a dead legionary spy with ranger armour under the dusker, Sunglass with J.M scratched onto the left edge of the glasses, this was a gift from his old tutor when he left the vault, And his warn out NCR first recon Beret.

Extra Info: Jackson has a scar across his right eye made by the enclave during his escape, He also has an entirely Robotic Right Hand reaching up to the wrist, Oddly enough this was given to him by the enclave after their Deathclaw assualt severed his hand, Without his hand Jackson would have died from blood loss/infection and they needed him alive.....for the time being. (Also has small scars across body from deathclaw assualt)

<Character Biography>
Orignally from Vault 87 when turning 10 he was such a tech wiz that when he took on his first vault responsability he was assigend to be the vaults newest Pip Boy Technican learning under a man Named Kelveche Roland. After studying 8 years of technology and machinary repair training he wandered out of the vault to find better uses of his talents then mere Pip Boys such as super computers or robots! Maybe even alternative energy.

Months after emerging from the vault he heard of the new highly advanced power station in Nevada called [HELIOS 1] so off he set for Nevada in search of his dream job. After 6 months of battles and triumphs he arrived at his destination [HELIOS 1] with his new companion or should i say girlfriend, Alice. Thankfully [HELIOS 1] Had been recently been attacked and one of the mechanics had died. This lead to Jackson getting a temporary job as a turret defense matainence worker, Although not directly joining the NCR he enjoyed the work and found it relativley challenging.

But one dreary tuesday sad word came from his old tutor Kelveche,who had been checking up on him from time to time via his advanced pipboy radio which could not only recieve signals but send them, Being a brainiac has its advantages. This news changed his life.......His parents had been brutally murdered by legionary forces at the boarder of the Colorado River. The legion had no use or interest in these 2 but they had been Payed a great some of caps by the Enclave to murder them due to the fact of their important affiliations with [Project Purity]. His parents had been coming for a suprise visit that day, It was his birthday afterall....But they never arrived.

After this tragedy he found it in himself to avenge them by joining the NCR directly, Being more trained in brain than braun he was rejected for direct solider work, But he found an alternative class that suited his style better, Stealth. 3 years of Training later, Jackson proudly became an NCR First Recon Stealth initate. Now he was trained in the art of Stealth and Escaping bondage,which came with many benefits. After being stationed at Camp Gulf for 2 months Jackson Was sent Back to the DC ruins to Gain enemy intel on a new threat the wasteland had been facing [The Enclave].

The First Recon Stealth Team [Beta] were all murdered in this stealth mission...All except for one who was brought in for questioning, The man that had been captured was none other than [Jackson Miles]. Electrocution,Firearms,Searing hot embers, These are some of the methods used to break his mind. But he never cracked, Not even for a second.

6 Months of being presumed dead he conjured up a plan with another inmate to escape from the Enclaves secert base, Getting out of the cage was at the price of the other inmate and escaping completly gave him a little reminder across his eye. But superior knowledge of both Stealth And Technology was able to gain him a one way ticket to freedom, Or at least to a small settlement called BigTown.

There he spent 1 year as the town's robotic matainence worker, But working for a job without pay was hardly a good way to live and he finally decided it was time to depart from his friends and find new purpose in his life. What would that be you may ask? Well that....That is the #1 Question.


meetdadoom

It was all going well until you paragraph 3. Why would the enclave pay the Legion to kill two people who are across the country when they see everyone as un-pure. They would have just called a massive mortar strike on the camps. Second, what the hell did Enclave pay Legion in Caps when first of all Enclave do not have a form of currency and that isn't Legion's form of currency! Third why would the enclave come all the way from D.C to Nevada when the west is full of NCR and Brother hood of steel both factions that ganked the Enclave. Since you said NCR being in the mojave, that would have meant that the Enclave have been destroyed by the BoS in New England. If you read the canon correctly, a large amount of Enclave troops tried to mingle with the wastelanders when the Enclave got destroyed. Why would the NCR send troops all the way to the East side when they don't even know what is in the middle of America and are in the middle of a fight with the Legion? Better, why would the NCR send troops into a place that is heavily infested by one of their rivals the BoS? If the NCR somehow wanted to waste a squad of highly trained soldiers, the BoS would have taken care of them. This story contains Logic fails and canon fails out the ass. Sorry to ruin your work. The start was nice but then it just went completely down hill from there.

[flash=500,30]http://www.youtube.com/v/9UousVNJaIM[/flash]

Paintcheck

First this server does not take place anywhere near New Vegas (although the sticky with the canon in it is horribly out of date and is still from when the server actually had good canon and factions rather than the shit it has now). Second the Enclave would not waste advanced prostheses on wastelanders since they hate them and want them all killed. At best they would stop the bleeding with a bandage, pump you for info, and then put a bullet through your skull if you were being too difficult. There's no shortage of wastelanders for them to question, they don't need to waste resources on you for 6 months.

Otherwise, I've seen much, much worse. Good first attempt, just figure the canon out better.

Iam333

Quote from: Wikipedia on 17-10-2011
Vault 87 A Force Evolutionary Virus research facility.
In 2077, the original inhabitants of Vault 87 were taken to airtight chambers and exposed to a concentrated form of FEV. The Overseer and his security guards were not aware of what it was, but were simply following orders from Vault-Tec. When the first vault dwellers were turned into super mutants, they forcibly mutated the others, until the remaining population were either mutated or killed.
The Vault 87 super mutants are obsessed with the preservation of their brand new species. Since they are all sterile, they kidnap humans from all over the Capital Wasteland and bring them to the vault to be mutated. They have been doing so for nearly 200 years, until their source of FEV started to run out. Because of the shortage of the "green stuff," there are now super mutant bands searching all over the Capital Wasteland for a new source of the virus.
Im not sure if it was on purpose or you took random number, but its always smart to check wiki for canon Vaults. I wonder how your character made it out without mutation, wandered from Capital Wasteland into Mojave and went into New England after that.

jaik

this faggotry makes me want to cry
Blake.H: And im also working on whipping him into shape
Blake.H: He's nice
Blake.H: He doesn't moan
Blake.H: The sheer obedience is enough to fuel my erection anyway

lolKieck

Quote from: Jake on 17-10-2011
this faggotry makes me want to cry
I'll go get you more tissues, we will have more of backstories like that.
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Iam333

Quote from: lolKieck on 18-10-2011
Quote from: Jake on 17-10-2011
this faggotry makes me want to cry
I'll go get you more tissues, we will have more of backstories like that.
FORP could have sub-name: NO NEW VEGAS, GOOD DAY SIR.

lolKieck

Quote from: Iam333 on 18-10-2011
Quote from: lolKieck on 18-10-2011
Quote from: Jake on 17-10-2011
this faggotry makes me want to cry
I'll go get you more tissues, we will have more of backstories like that.
FORP could have sub-name: NO NEW VEGAS, GOOD DAY SIR.
More of: "CUSTOM CANON"
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Das_Uberman


Quote from: meetdadoom on 17-10-2011It was all going well until you paragraph 3. Why would the enclave pay the Legion to kill two people who are across the country when they see everyone as un-pure. They would have just called a massive mortar strike on the camps. Second, what the hell did Enclave pay Legion in Caps when first of all Enclave do not have a form of currency and that isn't Legion's form of currency! Third why would the enclave come all the way from D.C to Nevada when the west is full of NCR and Brother hood of steel both factions that ganked the Enclave. Since you said NCR being in the mojave, that would have meant that the Enclave have been destroyed by the BoS in New England. If you read the canon correctly, a large amount of Enclave troops tried to mingle with the wastelanders when the Enclave got destroyed. Why would the NCR send troops all the way to the East side when they don't even know what is in the middle of America and are in the middle of a fight with the Legion? Better, why would the NCR send troops into a place that is heavily infested by one of their rivals the BoS? If the NCR somehow wanted to waste a squad of highly trained soldiers, the BoS would have taken care of them. This story contains Logic fails and canon fails out the ass. Sorry to ruin your work. The start was nice but then it just went completely down hill from there.


This.


Also this.


Quote from: zirman on 17-10-2011
Extra Info: Jackson has a scar across his right eye made by the enclave during his escape, He also has an entirely Robotic Right Hand reaching up to the wrist, Oddly enough this was given to him by the enclave after their Deathclaw assualt severed his hand, Without his hand Jackson would have died from blood loss/infection and they needed him alive.....for the time being. (Also has small scars across body from deathclaw assualt)


The Enclave don't really have the technology for robotic limbs, nor would they take the time to make one for a common wastelander. And the logic behind it is flawed. How can it be that you would only live if they replaced your hand with a robotic one? They would have just cauterized it with a laser, or killed you. most likely the second.


lolKieck

Quote from: Das_Uberman on 20-10-2011

Quote from: meetdadoom on 17-10-2011It was all going well until you paragraph 3. Why would the enclave pay the Legion to kill two people who are across the country when they see everyone as un-pure. They would have just called a massive mortar strike on the camps. Second, what the hell did Enclave pay Legion in Caps when first of all Enclave do not have a form of currency and that isn't Legion's form of currency! Third why would the enclave come all the way from D.C to Nevada when the west is full of NCR and Brother hood of steel both factions that ganked the Enclave. Since you said NCR being in the mojave, that would have meant that the Enclave have been destroyed by the BoS in New England. If you read the canon correctly, a large amount of Enclave troops tried to mingle with the wastelanders when the Enclave got destroyed. Why would the NCR send troops all the way to the East side when they don't even know what is in the middle of America and are in the middle of a fight with the Legion? Better, why would the NCR send troops into a place that is heavily infested by one of their rivals the BoS? If the NCR somehow wanted to waste a squad of highly trained soldiers, the BoS would have taken care of them. This story contains Logic fails and canon fails out the ass. Sorry to ruin your work. The start was nice but then it just went completely down hill from there.


This.


Also this.


Quote from: zirman on 17-10-2011
Extra Info: Jackson has a scar across his right eye made by the enclave during his escape, He also has an entirely Robotic Right Hand reaching up to the wrist, Oddly enough this was given to him by the enclave after their Deathclaw assualt severed his hand, Without his hand Jackson would have died from blood loss/infection and they needed him alive.....for the time being. (Also has small scars across body from deathclaw assualt)


The Enclave don't really have the technology for robotic limbs, nor would they take the time to make one for a common wastelander. And the logic behind it is flawed. How can it be that you would only live if they replaced your hand with a robotic one? They would have just cauterized it with a laser, or killed you. most likely the second.


What did you expect, besides, he left after people first talking about his backstory.
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