C.H.O.T.A Faction <Denied, read to get an Idea of how not to make a faction>

Started by meetdadoom, 27-03-2011

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meetdadoom

                                                                                                           C.H.O.T.A
                                                                                                 Children Of The Apocalypse

                                                                                   
                                                                        Music of Cataclysm - WELCOME TO ORGRIMMAR


Back Story: The Children of the Apocalypse, originally stationed in The Grand Canyon Province, is a Tribal group dedicated to destroying technology and anyone who tries to save it. The C.H.O.T.A.s belive that pre-war Technology lead to the fall of Man and that the Nuclear War was a way of hitting the reset button. The C.H.O.T.A.s originally were vault dwellers of a Vault in Grand Canyon. The Social experiment was the Enclave took all of the physically unfit applicants and put them in a vault that promoted a healthy life style and trained the residence of the vault heavily. The thing keeping the residence from slacking off were the robots that tortured the residence. 1/8 of the residence died due to the robots over doing the torture. 3/8 of the vault died due to fatigue and exaustion. A few years after the bombs fell, the Vault Dwellers got sick and tired of the robots. They didn't care about the working out part and the healthy life style and not eating unhealthy foods, they were just sick of the robots killing them off. The Vault Dwellers banded together and attacked all of the Robots. They destroyed every robot. A decade after the Uprise the Vault Dwellers finnaly decided to open the Vault door. They saw the dark and depressing world of the WasteLand.

The Vault Dwellers finnally made a conclusion stating that technology like the robots that tortured them, weapons like guns and lasers and nukes, caused the fall of man. The Vault Dwellers made a giant fire pit outside the vault and burned all technology. They created a name for themselves, they were the Lost Children in a dark and destroyed world. They were the Children Of The Apocalypse. They resorted to a somewhat tribal like lifestyle and made melee weapons using the scrap around them. Only a very select few of members were given guns and those were the Hawks who were given Snipers. The C.H.O.T.A sent out a scout party to search the land and came back giving details about the surrounding groups in the Area including a faction called the Enforcers. The Enforcers were a military like group that thought that the through order, they can bring back civilization. The C.H.O.T.A were given a message from the Enforcers to be drafted into their army. The C.H.O.T.A were outraged seeing how the Enforcer faction was exactly like the robots that tortured them and went against their ideaology. The C.H.O.T.A continued to train their men and gather forces from surronding tribals. The Enforcers and C.H.O.T.A fought brutally against each other. No side ever getting the upperhand. The Enforcers had the guns and had alot of men but, the moral amongst the troops were easily deminished due to the C.H.O.T.A's strength. The C.H.O.T.A had very strong men and had an unbreakable moral however, they lacked the numbers.
           Present day, the C.H.O.T.A finnally got into a cease-fire with the Enforcers due to a new mutant threat. The C.H.O.T.A took the oppurtunity to send 10 people of the Warlord Councilmen to recruit new members and to gain more territory. The Warlord named RedClaw was sent to Kentucky Area to start up a town that can be used as a fall back land incase of the Enforcers push the C.H.O.T.A East.
           
          The Ranks of C.H.O.T.A

1)Warlord

Path of the Warrior:

2)ChaosReaper Elite
2.5)ChaosReaper
3)ChaosBloods
4)BlackBloods
5)DarkBloods
6)EnlightenedBloods
7)Novice   

Path of the Fox:  (May become one when you become a DarkBlood)

2 Wise Boar
3 Shaman
4 Owl
5 Whisperer

               The Path of the Warrior is the norm however, some want to help the advancement of the Tribe and help the fight by not exactly fighting. They are scientists, doctors and charismatic ones.
               Everyone in the C.H.O.T.A including the talking ones (people following the path of the fox) has to do a job such as gather scrap, build homes, create armor, build weapons, harvest wood, farm, etc.
               Anyone who is recruited from the Kentucky area becomes a Novice and must do the "Trails" to become an Enlightened one. The Enlightened ones are actual Members.

               If you want a good Idea of how the C.H.O.T.A are like, imagine the Ceaser's Legion and the Krogans from Mass Effect.
               

   

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meetdadoom

Please give me FeedBack on the Faction Idea and supports if you like the idea.

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jaik

It will die as soon as BoS will hear about it.
Blake.H: And im also working on whipping him into shape
Blake.H: He's nice
Blake.H: He doesn't moan
Blake.H: The sheer obedience is enough to fuel my erection anyway

Plunger


jaik

Blake.H: And im also working on whipping him into shape
Blake.H: He's nice
Blake.H: He doesn't moan
Blake.H: The sheer obedience is enough to fuel my erection anyway

Cutch


"Stop living life so that you can do a job with out pay"
-Blake/Last Exile

meetdadoom

Quote from: Plunger on 27-03-2011
So I heard you like plagiarizing a faction from another game completely.

http://fallenearth.wikia.com/wiki/Children_of_the_Apocalypse

Didn't I make it as clear as I can that I was going to create a faction from Fallen Earth? I even made a this thread like a year before FoRP existed just when silver finnally started buckling down on FoRP he wiped the boards so I copy and pasted the one I wrote.

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Cutch


"Stop living life so that you can do a job with out pay"
-Blake/Last Exile

meetdadoom

Quote from: Cutch on 27-03-2011
You had the Vistas, which was stupid anyway.

Then Cutch, why didn't you say anything about that?

Also cutch I would like to hear your opinion so I don't make "Retarded" PBGs.

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meetdadoom

Quote from: Jake on 27-03-2011
It will die as soon as BoS will hear about it.

+Support or -Support and please give feedback.

Also I am aware that BoS might not like this faction :P

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Frostee

This also sounds like a cheap knockoff of the "Followers of the Apocalypse"...

meetdadoom

Quote from: FrostyFrosty on 27-03-2011
This also sounds like a cheap knockoff of the "Followers of the Apocalypse"...

I knew someone would say that. No this is Fallen EArth canon not Followers of the Apocalypse. Followers of the Apocalypse want to restore prewar society if I am correct. Did you just read the name and then read the comments and not the actual back story?

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Plunger

This is the worst idea for a playerbased faction I ever seen. The ranks sound like a "Super OMG Badass Hulk Group", and the backstory makes no fucking sense.

Tom

I think this would have been great if. . .

1) You made the social experiment for your vault, make sense
2) If you didn't almost directly rip this from Fallen Earth (I mean you could've renamed it, its rival, and the ranks, and your warlords name, its almost a direct if not IS a direct clone of the Fallen earth faction)
3) If your ranks where less. . . "Badassy sounding" and you know what I mean when I say "Badassy sounding", sorta like a small child made the names of the ranks.

BUT if you manage to make a Tribal group of folks that act tribal more power to you, but the Name/backstory/ranks needs work, badly.
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jaik

It doesn't even matter if it gets accepted as a group or not.
It won't become official anyways.
Blake.H: And im also working on whipping him into shape
Blake.H: He's nice
Blake.H: He doesn't moan
Blake.H: The sheer obedience is enough to fuel my erection anyway

meetdadoom

Thank you everyone for your feedback (except for frosty for being a complete idiot and cutch for not actually reading it). This is why I didn't make this a faction yet. I might try again with a different tribal group. I am keeping this as an archive so I can learn from my mistakes.

Also Frosty the reason why I call you a complete idiot.

C.H.O.T.A : Hates technology and wants to restart life.

Followers of the apocalypse: Want to re-educate the world and bring back society (They are similiar to the Enforcers)

Source: "The Followers of the Apocalypse are a secular-humanist faction, dedicated to reeducating and rebuilding the wasteland and to ensuring that humanity does not repeat the mistakes that led to the Great War"
http://fallout.wikia.com/wiki/Followers_of_the_Apocalypse

How the fuck are the two the same?

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Ragolution

I wonder if I could set the framework for a tribal group but not be a part of it, or lead it or anything at all.


Hmmn...

WIP.

meetdadoom

Quote from: Ragolution on 30-03-2011
I wonder if I could set the framework for a tribal group but not be a part of it, or lead it or anything at all.


Hmmn...

WIP.

By all means, part of tribals are rival tribes.

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